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All thy Heart, All thy Soul, All thy Mind
"God or me."

"What?"

"You heard. Choose, God or me."

I looked at him, half confused half shocked.

"It's obvious that there's not enough room in your life for both him and me. We're two completely different entities. He'd sooner have you lock someone up than let them have an abortion, I'd sooner lock you up than stop them. I see sex as a wonderful and liberating experience, he considers non-procreative sex to be a sin. He strongly encourages procreation itself, I believe it to be nigh inexcusable for the informed person. He declares homosexuality a sin, I fuck men. I can't take it anymore, I doubt he likes it much either."

He looked into me, his eyes full of pain.

He left. I prayed.

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27/08/07 06:20am
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Mon, 27 Aug 2007 at 06:20am
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Mon, 27 Aug 2007 at 11:08am
inthecafeteria:
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This is what it's all about.
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Mon, 27 Aug 2007 at 05:29pm
galanteeshowman:
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Wow... Nice. Last line tops it off. +1.
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Mon, 27 Aug 2007 at 11:31pm
burning_sands:
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what?
this makes me want to cry
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Tue, 4 Sep 2007 at 02:51am
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:(

:?

:|

:)

Enough. +1.
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Mon, 10 Sep 2007 at 02:23am
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BZZZAAP!
I missed this one somehow... the newsletter made me check it out...

I can see this applying to a relationship in my life, in all exactness... And I can see someone choosing God over me and I don't know if it is something that I would be truly prepared to deal with...

A*, and milkman hadnt already exploited this glitch, I would give this as many A*s as I could...

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Mon, 10 Sep 2007 at 02:28am
aetherlightning:
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BZZZAAP!
I missed this one somehow... the newsletter made me check it out...

I can see this applying to a relationship in my life, in all exactness... And I can see someone choosing God over me and I don't know if it is something that I would be truly prepared to deal with...

A*, and milkman hadnt already exploited this glitch, I would give this as many A*s as I could...

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Wed, 12 Sep 2007 at 06:17pm
kluny:
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Oh, hey. A*.
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Mon, 24 Sep 2007 at 01:59am
wrought_iron_rose:
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...so very prettyful and yet so very sad. (been wanting to comment badly, can't say how many times 've read it and re-read it. Yes, IT'S THAT GOOD.) +1
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Tue, 6 Nov 2007 at 07:59am
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My first thought after reading this was "Wow."
After a hundred reads, I'm still thinking that. I love this.

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Wed, 28 Nov 2007 at 12:56pm
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Oh wow.
A*...my first ever. You deserve it.
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Wed, 12 Dec 2007 at 07:52pm
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that was so damn beautiful

plussed

and

A-ed
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Wed, 12 Dec 2007 at 08:49pm
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This is amazing. I don't know, just everything about it made me feel so many things all at once.

Plus one.
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Thu, 17 Jan 2008 at 05:45pm
burning_sands:
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what?
this still makes me want to cry. i hate religion sometimes. :'(

i do love this piece though. and i know that,being the atheist snob that i am, this situation could definitely happen at sometime eventually in the far off future of my existence. i am not excited.
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Sat, 22 Mar 2008 at 07:54am
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I like, very, very much.
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Tue, 25 Mar 2008 at 06:22pm
macca:
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This stuck in my head for ages.
And sort of hits home in a sense that loads can relate to having to chose parts of life that contradicts with religion even though you can't tell which is really right.



Hmmmm *she muses*
+1!
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Mon, 21 Apr 2008 at 10:06pm
ikasu:
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flash fiction is wonderful; we don't have to know these people's names, or what they look like, to understand who they are and how they feel. That's the beauty of this piece.
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Thu, 1 May 2008 at 12:12am
burning_sands:
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what?
He looked into me, his eyes full of pain.

i just love the fact that you use 'into' instead of 'in'
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