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He waved at me everyday, like some kind of idiot, as we passed each other on the breezeway. I didn’t know him, he didn’t know me, but he was one of the obnoxious types who truly thinks he’s being funny when people laugh as the shreds of his dignity are torn by his antics.

So.

He waved to me.

And sometimes I laughed; sometimes I ignored him; sometimes I quirked an eyebrow, but I never said a word.

And one day he wasn’t there.


The next day, as he looked for me among the students, I rushed forward, popped out from behind a pole and elbowed him hard in the gut.

He sat on his ass, hard, coughing and choking and I just walked away, smirking.

It was so worth it.

<-- Lips that Taste of Tears
1/07/09 06:09am
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Wed, 1 Jul 2009 at 06:31am
subliminiminal:
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ten toi.
I like this. It's short, and...

and I'm trying to say something other than "I don't know why I like it, I just do", which (at least the way I hear it as the voice in my head) sounds as though I'm talking out of my ass about something vaguely intriguing a piece of writing may or may not have (which your piece definitely has, in a non-vague manner), and then I'd have to explain myself in a manner that sidetracks the comment from the subject of your piece to my... own... neuroses... huh.

I like it.
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Thu, 2 Jul 2009 at 05:55am
ferdinandtheviii:
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you know, on the one hand i say that's rather mean, elbowing someone for smiling at you . . . but on the other hand, he had it coming. i especially like the second to last paragraph and its infinitives.
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Thu, 2 Jul 2009 at 09:08am
poison:
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In response to the previous comment, I really don't see how he "had it coming," but okay.

Anyway, as far as the actual piece goes, I like it. Perhaps because I can sympathize because I, myself, act exactly as the male persona in this piece. For me, though, it's not so much that I think I'm being funny in acting as such but just to make whomever I'm waving at smile.

I would probably laugh if I got elbowed in the stomach for waving to someone, though. After I got up off the floor.

- Matt
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